Quote of the Week: Again on Ivy Leaguers’ Writing Skills


20131205204227!Harvard_shield-BusinessFrom an actual e-mail of a corporate COO, an HBS alumnus, blind-copied to several bankers, who lost their bids for the company's business, as well as to a few other addressees:

"As you know, we analyzed several competing offers.  One has been accepted and a good faith deposit paid.  All banks were quite detailed and specific in their term sheets.  In order to make both a proper and fair comparison, any uncertain items had to be discounted.  While it might have been useful to fully clarify all conditions and parameters, we made a decision not to allow banks to tweak their offers.  We felt strongly about not creating a Middle Eastern bizarre mentality and having every bank but one ultimately feeling used or abused."

The Frustrated CFO's comment:  Never mind the awkward phrasing and sentence structure.  How about that biased ethnic remark?  Except that it's not.  Well, at least it wasn't meant as such.  I actually asked and was told that somebody used the phrase on the news and that what the COO thought he's heard.  I had to explain that it was a "Middle Eastern bazaar" people referred to as a metaphor for haggling.  I talked him out of making a mess with a retraction.  "Bizarre bazaar… whatever," I said.        

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